I wrote this poem for my husband recently, I would love some feedback from poetry enthusiasts!
Your Intoxicating fragrance
I am delirious
Dancing in your
Bouquet of pearly white peaks
Delicate sea legs
Wobbly wooden stalks
Fragile, Fertile foliage
Your clear spring geyser
Raining sky water
Relieve my parched
Sea of Fertility
Your Renewing promise
I am breathless
A Cacophony of birdsong
Gorgeous milk fluff
A canopy of tranquility
In the shape of a heart
FEAR OF LOSING YOU
No longer affectionate, attentive, thoughtful eyes;
instead, an expressionless, invisible, blank stare.
No longer strolling hand-in-hand, carelessly;
instead, walking moonbeams apart, drifting like clouds.
No longer drowning in passionate, lingering kisses;
instead, an obligatory, awkward, fleeting peck.
No longer two hearts bow-tied with strings;
instead, reclusive, lonely hearts, in a noose.
No longer dreaming of a lifetime together;
instead, an uncertain, somber, painful future.
No longer a confident, loving wife;
instead, a heartsick, lonely, aging woman,
Desperately afraid of losing you.